Atlas {Part One}

[Autumnwolf17]

So let me revise.... write about Autumnwolf17.

(Don't really)

[Fangfallen]

I understand.

[Autumnwolf17]

I understand.

I don't...

[Fangfallen]

Bumped. Let me know what you think of the Prologue. That was the rough draft.

[Fangfallen]

Also, I'm still taking suggestions.

[attackbomb]

Prologue

Spoiler: show

The year is 2142 AD. Earth is falling due to GENUINE AWESOMENESS caused by A BADA**. Communist CAKEY allied with Communist BACONLAND to develop a new kind of weapon. POTATOES ARE GOOD, yes. This was different. The ATTACKBOMB was a NINJA that was developed by a CAKEY scientist by the name of PIE PIENESS, but the BACON PEOPLES had the necessary materials. The ATTACKBOMB is different from other AWESOME bombs in the fact that it is microscopic and airborne. It was released by SMELLING PIE to the general population of Earth. The only thing we had going for us was the fact that humans were naturally immune to the ATTACKBOMB. It still managed to AWESOMESIZE a few hundred thousand people. The AWESOMENESSES emitted lethal doses of radiation to there surrounding habitat (the cake factory) yet they never LAUGHED because of it.

Chapter P1E coming soon.

this is much better now

[Fangfallen]

I'm generally quite calm, and would even laugh at this. But please stop! I wan't honest opinions of my writing not half-assed attempts at humor.

[royalblue]

Hey Attackbomb, be cool. Remember when you made your writing thing? Nobody did that to you (I think).

To Fang: It looks good so far, although short. Write more.

[Fangfallen]

Updated prologue and added chapter one.

[royalblue]

Updated prologue and added chapter one.

Good: It's interesting, I want to read more.
Bad: It's too short.