Vortex Wars

Figured this would be the place to post them. Nothing big, just noticed them when reading the bio's on the races that there were a few grammatical errors with words missing-- actually on quite a few of them.

Errors:
Pirates- '...scum of the seas are threat to...' -- are a threat
Ninjas- 'Only trace they leave behind is trail of...' -- behind is a trail
Angels- 'make world a better place...' -- make our world (currently set up as a proper noun, so if you don't use 'our' perhaps Earth would be more fitting?

Kind of off (these both read funny and I mentally entered the words in, however in writing these out I can see they may be fine without.)
Soldiers- '...best of the bestest that future has to offer...' -- that the future (works without though.)
Vampires- 'Children of night are ready to fight.' -- Children of the night (also works without, and may even ruin the rhyme scheme to add 'the' just another one I noticed.)

Sorry to be a grammar nazi, just figured I'd put it out there.

My guess is that sense the creator of the game's main language is not English, this could explain all of that.

you nazi Good eye.

Robomajor wrote:My guess is that sense the creator of the game's main language is not English, this could explain all of that.

I'm pretty sure his main language is Slovakian.

Seriously meant no disrespect. Awesome game. Just pointed out what I noticed and wanted to put it out there if it need be corrected.

We know, and applaud you for it.

thanks, keep them coming I would like to fix all typos and mistakes like this

ArcticShadow wrote:Angels- 'make world a better place...' -- make our world (currently set up as a proper noun, so if you don't use 'our' perhaps Earth would be more fitting?

Actually it isn't supposed to mean our world (Earth), but some other unspecified world (theirs or world where vortex wars are happening). Isn't "a world" more appropriate? Or should I rather specify which world I mean, or expand it to "our universe"?

Lopdo wrote:Actually it isn't supposed to mean our world (Earth), but some other unspecified world (theirs or world where vortex wars are happening). Isn't "a world" more appropriate? Or should I rather specify which world I mean, or expand it to "our universe"?

'A world' would work just fine for an unspecified world. Our universe also works as well, whichever way you want to do it.

"[...] make the world a better place." is also a very common sentence.